早洩大師

無名小忍者 (？－？)
內容︰一個忍者..........

所屬軍隊︰中立軍
主要屬性︰敏捷
初始生命︰700[小忍者一名 1技右好似有小小屈正常1技電唔到佢=_=]
初始法力︰225
攻擊距離︰30{用長刀}
定位︰暗殺、主力、CP

力量 12 (+2)?正確嗎?
敏捷 28 (+3)
智力 12 (+2)?正確嗎=_=?

天生技:忍者大師
+移動速度30%+攻擊速度+30%

1技:殘影 敵方玩家望到佢好似慢0.2/0.3/0.4/0.5秒咁[姐係永久忍型]有16/18/20/22%miss
{永久啟動}
2技:忍者刀法 20/30/40/50%絕對命中 和永久加10/15/20/25攻擊

3技:小組攻擊 召喚3隻下忍/中忍/上忍/忍者大師[hp500/650/800/1000][混沌攻擊60/65/70/75][佢地和這英雄一樣打扮][持續10秒]一齊係上下後3個不同方向衝插目標傷害{100/200/300/400}並暈眩[0.5/1/1.5/2秒]用魔200 cd 25

大技 死亡沖鋒
和3個組員[佢地和這和英雄一樣打扮]一齊向目標沖鋒1000範圍距離[800/1200傷害]並暈眩[1/1.3秒]一次之後一齊向4個不同方向[600]範圍閃開 {不會onxx閃左到人地屋企]用300魔 cd90秒

35lv大 [真忍術.心意把] 無名小忍者早把心神合一會通了,現在深明人刀合一中之大義!心中只有小宇宙......己經別無他物了!
現有的力量 智力 提升兩倍
攻擊時有40%機率有爆彈爆出來[660魔法傷害]



我都算好比心機加啦=_=望佢有得比人造左出來比我用下好......

[ 本帖最後由 早洩大師 於 2012-11-23 07:04 編輯 ]

InViSiBlE

阿爾唔得閒造啦, Spiker 兄作左咁多個英雄一個都無出, 幾時到你同我

有幾個point

First of all, you have omitted 3 fundamental stats including STR, DEX and INT. Despite this, you have come up with 550 HP and 200 MP,  which should be adjusted by an amount proportional to STR and INT.  550 HP is indeed too low. There is no sense that the hero will be killed with 2 moves (possibly, oda's second skill + electric shock).

Second, I cannot understand the description of Skill W and E. Please Clarify

Third, what is the operation of skill R? You mention " [和英雄一樣打扮][持續10秒]". Does it mean you can control them? But soon after you said "上下後3個不同方向衝插目標傷害{100/200/300/400}" , which means you cannot control them and this would perform fixed amount of damage.  The skill is too weak because it is targeted for single attack but deal only 400 damages, at maximum.

Last, Skill T is acceptable, but you should mention cast distance of the skill.

早洩大師

引用:

原帖由 　InViSiBlE　 於 2012-11-22 10:14 發表
阿爾唔得閒造啦, Spiker 兄作左咁多個英雄一個都無出, 幾時到你同我

有幾個point

First of all, you have omitted 3 fundamental stats including STR, DEX and INT. Despite this, you have come up with 550 HP ...

...............有無中文 係唔係招大無左閃走好d?= = 但係我認為有得閃走好d=_=咁我加強小小hp幫佢



which means you cannot control them and this would perform fixed amount of damage.  The skill is too weak because it is targeted for single attack but deal only 400 damages, at maximum. <<<係唔係姐係話招3技太廢?

[ 本帖最後由 早洩大師 於 2012-11-22 12:46 編輯 ]

天地煞

引用:

原帖由 　InViSiBlE　 於 2012-11-22 10:14 發表
阿爾唔得閒造啦, Spiker 兄作左咁多個英雄一個都無出, 幾時到你同我

有幾個point

First of all, you have omitted 3 fundamental stats including STR, DEX and INT. Despite this, you have come up with 550 HP ...

大佬,一句野有兩個main verbs,想點

spiker

引用:

原帖由 　InViSiBlE　 於 22-11-2012 10:14 發表
阿爾唔得閒造啦, Spiker 兄作左咁多個英雄一個都無出, 幾時到你同我

有幾個point ...

First of all, you have omitted 3 fundamental stats including STR, DEX and INT. Despite this, you have come up with 550 HP and 200 MP,  which should be adjusted by an amount proportional to STR and INT.  550 HP is indeed too low. There is no sense that the hero will be killed with 2 moves (possibly, oda's second skill + electric shock).
首先，你漏左 3 大屬性，包括力量、敏捷及智慧。唔理咁樣，你就有550血量及200法力，咁即係應該調節力量及智慧的數值，550血量實在太少，咁係好唔合理的，隻英2野就會死。(或者，Oda的二技+電卷你就再見)




Second, I cannot understand the description of Skill W and E. Please Clarify
第二，我唔明W技同E技的說明，請寫清楚。




Third, what is the operation of skill R? You mention " [和英雄一樣打扮][持續10秒]". Does it mean you can control them? But soon after you said "上下後3個不同方向衝插目標傷害{100/200/300/400}" , which means you cannot control them and this would perform fixed amount of damage.  The skill is too weak because it is targeted for single attack but deal only 400 damages, at maximum.
第三，R技的行動係點樣? 你話「
[和英雄一樣打扮][持續10秒] 」，咁係咪代表你可以控制佢地呢? 但係根住你就話「 上下後3個不同方向衝插目標傷害{100/200/300/400} 」，咁即係代表你唔可以控制佢地，並且咁係係做到固定傷害的。此技能太廢，因為佢係單體目標但最多只造成400傷害。




Last, Skill T is acceptable, but you should mention cast distance of the skill.

最後，T技可接受，但係你應該講解佢既施法距離

早洩大師

1技係永久忍型 不個有個殘影跟隨  2技意思係好似山王果招3技咁 爆出來下下打得中咁

3技係好似火狗招1技咁可以卡位 但係有d不一樣~_~

大技係用左之後馬上 閃走

[ 本帖最後由 早洩大師 於 2012-11-22 15:35 編輯 ]